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Reviews for Spider's Web Trilogy - The Spider's Bite

By : Shadow-Of-The-Guardian

From Silver on February 01, 2014
Liked reading the new chapter. Please write more soon. Also,

Carmilla Black - Scorpion.

Melissa Joan Gold - Songbird aka Screaming Mimi.

Walter Langkowski - Sasquatch.

Emil Blonsky - Abomination.

Tandy Bowen - Dagger.

Tyrone Johnson - Cloak.

Do I get it right? If so, the next woman to be seduced by Peter Parker should be Gwen Stacy, followed by Felicia Hardy, and lastly by Kitty Pride. Please let me know. Thank you. :)

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From MF22 on January 05, 2014
Interesting take with the OZ serum. Is it safe to assume that since you introduced Gwen, and given Peter's reaction to her words and body, that she'll end up being involved somehow in all this?

Now, the wild card in all this is Natasha. What is her next action, and what was the proverbial "other side" she thought of turning Peter to?

Also, what of Fury, who was clearly keeping tabs on Peter? How will he react to seeing all these different girls with powers popping up all over the place, and at almost the same time? He's not stupid; there's no way he'd see it as a mere coincidence, especially after Natasha said neither of them believes in coincidence. With Peter and the girls forming their own team, Fury likely isn't take to that well.
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From redsliver on December 22, 2013
A good chapter, Peter explaining his plan and leaving out so much of it all at once. I find it very difficult to believe Peter would slip something into anyone's drink but it still worked. There's always been a cause for suspension of disbelief when Spider-man has a harem. Luckily, I adore this trope.

FYI: Persons of Mass Destruction? I love this term. I have an idea of where I'd like to use it in my own story, but I wanted to make sure you knew I was being inspired by your words.

Your writing is improving. You still suffer from a roundabout and redundant sentence structure.

You may want to try and use simple sentences a bit more often. Peter fucked MJ's ass. Lana gave her mother the finger. The table was in the kitchen.

Keep writing, I, and many others, want to read more.
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From Ryvius on December 21, 2013
Great chapter! Definitely worth the wait.

The orgy was great (the bit with Peter holding the girls up was weird, but creative). I liked the bits of character development we got for most of the girls, and Lori's more dominant side was pretty entertaining to see.

Looking forward to seeing Peter learning about MJ's powers, and what happens next.

Keep up the good work!
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From AgentGv01 on December 21, 2013
Chapter 10 review: Well so now all the women got together and all their cards have been placed on the table. (well for the most part) So I do wonder how this team will work out, most likely since Lori is the only adult at the moment any cash they take will most likely she will have to launder for them. Most likely will have to use some kind of 'legitimate' business. Not sure what kind but it would be effective, actually what might be fun for a little arc or a spin-off is a little visit to vegas to launder their cash.

I have to say I don't think I ever saw anyone write a sex scene with holding both girls up like that before, it would be a good use of Peter's strength and his powers to stick to things. I also liked that little thing with Lori as she seems to like 'playing house' with Peter as the 'daddy' for their little group. Plus it also is nice to see Lori teaching the girls how to get better at certain sex acts. I wonder if in the next chapter you'll have something like Gwen and MJ sitting awkwardly not used to anal sex yet.

Also wonder what other little games they'll get into soon, plus what Jessica's living situation will be as well. I also bet there needed to be a major clean up after that orgy, I also wonder when Peter will take time out to take the them out on dates. Most will be easy but something for Lori might be a bit harder as it's not like they can go out in public as a couple.
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From ANON - Anon on December 08, 2013
Loving Spider Bite. Awesome story and I cant wait to see how it turns out. Im also a fan of Agent-G and have been for a few years.
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From ANON - Silverscale on November 06, 2013
I like it. The whole concept of Peter having a spider venom that not only act as a sort of aphrodisiac but also as a super power drug is unique and very cool.
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From ANON - Coyotewere on November 05, 2013
This is one of the better-written fanfics I've had the pleasure of reading. Not just one of the better adult fanfics, but one of the better fanfics period. I'm curious if you're planning on adding women who haven't made an appearance in the Ultimate Marvel universe. Also, are you going to include every woman that spiderman bites become part of his...well, harem? I kind of imagine that he's going to have some women who are going to be much closer to him, as well as each other (Liz, MJ, Gwen, maybe Jessica), as well as more casual fuck-buddies.

I was kind of wondering where you're going to go with this. If you're going to bring the Kingpin into this story in any meaningful way, then Elektra is an obvious choice. HOWEVER...two options that come to mind; namely Captain Jeanne de Wolfe, and Vanessa Fisk. The possibility of Peter using both or either against Fisk might be interesting, as is the possibility of the kingpin owing his wife's awakening to his nemesis. Plus, I don't think anyone has ever written a story featuring them.
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From ANON - picajump on October 28, 2013
I love the work you put into this.
Everything fits together really well.
Kinda depressing how this is turning out much like the symbiot situation, where that word "responsibility" gets forgotten.
...
Hope he realizes this soon.
Rape-man is already a copyrighted name with his own series.

And I'm feeling anxious about reading onwards; things seem to be going well for Peter Parker.
Until it blows up in his face.
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From Silver on August 31, 2013
Liked reading this story so far. Please keep up the good work. As for your list of the women to be in Spider-Man's/Peter Parker's harem - I approve of and would really like to see the members of said list as full-time members of his harem. Lastly, I hope that there will be several scenes/chapters where Peter Parker has sex with all of the members of his harem since he has superhuman stamina and all. :) Thanks again.

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From ANON - Nerdman3000 on August 17, 2013
I like the list, but I really think you need to include Natasha and maybe Silver Sable in the list as well.

Anyways good chapter.
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From ANON - genetechi on August 11, 2013
I'd like to see Ms. Marvel and She-Hulk added. Spider-man's interactions/date with those 2 are amusing just because they are more powerful than him and love pointing that out.
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From AgentGv01 on August 11, 2013
Well I liked this chapter although the title is a bit misleading but besides that I felt that the chapter was well done. At first I was wondering how Black Widow got that line on Peter at first but it turning out to be all a dream helped explain a few things and it was a nice fake out as well as we see how she's dealing with the venom in her system as it's slowly causing her to get more and more wound up. I can't wait to see the moment she can't take it anymore.

The MJ part was also fun (although some of it was just exposition like her conversation with her mother about ripped clothing and that whole scene) but that wasn't as bad as a previous chapter that you fixed up but just be careful of that kind of stuff. Overall I liked how she looked up if she was a mutant or not as that would be the most logical thought at the moment although I wonder if she'll continue to think she is until she gets tested either at Xavier's or maybe even the Fantastic Four to get some testing out. It would be interesting if your FF story was in the same world as this as you have a bit of a crossover using their help to try and figure out what's going on. Or maybe Doc Connor's lab might be used to see if MJ has an x-gene or not.

Although maybe MJ is a closet exhibitionist given that thing at the game she pulled, for some reason I can see her in her Tigra form having sex in public.
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From Ratdogtwo on August 11, 2013
Another awesome chapter. I can say the opnly other women would be silver sable and or black widow
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From redsliver on July 18, 2013
Still hitting it strong there. I really like your Peter, he may seem a bit predatory but you keep the self doubt and tunnel vision quite well. Now that he knows about Osborn, Jessica and Octopus I am excited to see our Spider-man in action.

As a bit of constructive criticism: You write quite well, tend towards redundancy. To paraphrase an example: "Peter thought the breast milk tasted good in his opinion." Trimming those sentences could help.
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