Reviews for A Meaningful MomentBy : marvelmaster616 |
Fun story! I've developed a real soft spot for Kamala thanks to the recent series on Disney Plus. I'm assuming that show is at least partly the impetus behind this story?
There are a couple places where an editing pass or beta reader would've been good.
I also thought it was... interesting?... that you didn't spend a lot of time describing Kamala's body. In some ways, it makes sense - Kamala is the viewpoint character, and her not thinking about her body all that much is a valid narrative choice. On the other hand, a lot of your other stories spend time describing the women in more detail, which helps build the eroticism; so it feels like an odd choice, somewhat, not to do so for Kamala here.
Is it a result of focusing more on the emotional aspects of the scene? If so, that seems like a new, exciting method for you, one I wholeheartedly support.
In a similar vein, I thought the choice to have the encounter end after just one orgasm each was out of the ordinary for you, as was not having them finish together. This definitely lends weight to the idea you're focusing more on the emotional connection than the sex; the story isn't just PWP. Again, I wholeheartedly support this, and would love to see more stories of this sort.
I know I normally review almost exclusively for your Spider-Man (Peter Parker/Mary Jane Watson) content, but this was too good to resist. As a fan of Kamala Khan's Ms. Marvel and an enjoyer of the comics she's appeared and starred in, this was spectacular. Especially loved how you deepened her bond with the time-displaced Scott Summers/Cyclops from the past, and given what happened later with him and the other time-displaced X-Men going back to the past and their memories being inherited by their adult selves in the present, I wonder if this would be a memory the adult Cyclops would look back on fondly. Don't get me wrong; I'm Scott/Jean till I die, much like I'm Peter/MJ till I die, but Scott/Kamala is practically a thing of art unto itself. In that respect, I love how the later/more recent comics in which they've teamed up still have them retain their bond, despite the changes that have happened in their lives since. All in all, truly great work from you and looking forward to more.
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