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From ANON - flyingdragon on August 18, 2012
I loved this series, and I’d love to see a continuation of it even if it is only in a series of one shots.
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From Ragnarok on May 18, 2012
Gonna make it even better, i think!

If you write Sofia's sequence, I will draw it to illustrate it.
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From Ragnarok on May 06, 2012

Great, great history. Loved it.

The setup is pretty cool, and the cast of characters did it for me. I like the situations too (Sofia/Noriko/Santo/Brian being one of the best) and just how easy it is to believe these characters doing it. After all, teenagers are always so horny.

I think some scenes could have used more description to the characters (like the forementioned scene with Sofia), their bodies and facial expressions, but other than that, pretty cool.

I would love to see an expansion of Sofia's gangbang and her walk of shame, though. That painted a very, very cool image in my head. Or anything with Mercury. Love that character.
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From marvelmaster616 on June 28, 2010
Wow, a fresh chapter so soon? I like it! Thank you very much for updating so much sooner. It was much easier bearing such a wait. This was a very fun chapter. You covered a lot of ground, describing all sorts of crazy sex scenes that can only happen in a series like this. lol I was a bit disappointed that they weren't as detailed as previous chapters, but I understand how hard that is when you have so many going on. That's okay. The reader can still use their imagination. lol I really got a kick out of that scene with Betsy and Scott. While that whole meeting was going on, she was going down on him? Brilliant and funny! I hope you take some time to give them a scene in the final chapter because they did have a brief fling back in the comics. I also liked how you had Hellion finally get his moment with Emma Frost. I'm sure he fantasized about that many a times and to finally make it reality must have been a real kicker. You even got Mystique involved! Could she make another appearance before the end? I certainly hope so because there's so much you can do with a shape-shifter. Hell, she could shift into Jean and fill the void for the final push. Either way, I really enjoyed this chapter and this story as a whole. I strongly encourage you to keep on writing and I hope you'll do more after this series is over. Thanks again and keep up the great work!
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From marvelmaster616 on June 24, 2010
Nice job! I haven't seen a new chapter for this story for a long time and I thought you gave up on it. I'm glad to see I was wrong. I hope you continue! I read your last story and it was really great. I definitely want to see where this story goes. You ended it with a bang, both literally and figuratively last time. I can only imagine how this one is going to end. You did a great job with Sam and Danielle. I also have a soft spot for Alex and Lorna. Any chance Alex will get a shot at Emma? Scott is his brother and it would be only the brotherly thing to do in these strange circumstances. lol I'm sure he would be okay giving him a chance at Lorna to make it fair. I would also like to see more with the Cuckoos. Three hot blonde teens have so much potential. Please keep up the good work and I hope you write more! You're one of the few quality writers left who does stories like these and I hope we get more from you in the future.
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From salarta on June 22, 2010
I only checked out these stories for the bits that have Lorna in them (she's pretty much the only X-men character I actually care about), and now that I have, I must say great work. You seem to have made better use of her in this one than the first time around, and it was quite an enjoyable read.

With your premise, I'm going to state one very obvious suggestion that I've thought of before and will probably use someday myself, but have no problem seeing you make good use of it. For a time, between losing her powers and Marvel abandoning her in space (so after the setting of this one), Lorna was Pestilence. During her brief time as Pestilence, she had plague manipulation abilities, which involved the ability to ingest and synthesize various plagues, control virulence and genetic markers, release them either in a combined form or in their original state, etc. In the canon storyline, she was ingesting every deadly virus in the world for Apocalypse's plan to eventually release it on the populace. On the flipside, in one of the space arcs before Marvel completely ditched her potential half a year ago, she was shown resisting anesthetics. Given your premise of a sex virus, Lorna during or post Pestilence is an EXTREMELY good candidate for either causing an extreme outbreak (whether unintentionally or as a 'queen of sex' villain role) or serving as a base for a final, definite cure. The 'queen of sex' villain angle is especially conducive to giving each X-man and X-woman special quirks that separate them from each other. Say, that perhaps Lorna makes Storm get most turned on by striking herself with lightning, or makes Wanda get a strong rush by using her hexes to humiliate other people, or makes a subset of the people she infects prefer nipple play.

In the end, it's just tossing out ideas you could possibly use in the future. Whatever you do, keep up the good work. :)
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From Dusel on June 22, 2010
Huhuhuhuh, this is so good and so funny, loved the Blindfold thing.
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From marvelmaster616 on February 13, 2010
Hey there! It's glad to see this story is still going. It's been a while since the last update and I was starting to worry that you had halted this story. It would be a shame because this is one of the best ongoing stories on this site. It's still very well written and the scenes are very nicely crafted. They're not too crude, but just crude enough to be hot. lol Plus, you can totally see this happening on some levels. Rogue, Remy, Kitty, and Piotr in a game of strip poker where Remy keeps winning? That works so well and I love how you put it together! I really do think he did cheat, but it was all for a good cause. He got Rogue and Kitty to give lap dances. How cool is that? lol Love what you did and I hope you continue with this story. It's hard waiting so long for new chapters. I hope the next one will come soon and I look forward to reading it! Keep up the good work. Slickboy out!

PS: Might I make a suggestion? Bobby and Emma had some moments earlier in the comics. Maybe give him some time with the Cuckoos? I think he would enjoy that!
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From MarvelFan98 on February 10, 2010
Glad to see you're back. I love this story, great work so far. I'd like to maybe see Dani Moonstar if that's possible.
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From infiniteking on September 25, 2009
I really enjoyed reading this story, especially the Jay/Laurie scene.

Any chance of seeing Mercury in this?
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From on August 13, 2009
Well I think I liked the X23/Hellion/Exlier scene the best out of this chapter, the other one was okay although I wonder who that girl will do for a male experience as she seems to be the only one without any sexual experience I know what you said about the girls as in no first times but with how you wrote her the only explanation would have been that she did it once and it hadn't been good, but with how you wrote her in that scene it wouldn't make sense if you put that in another chapter.

You know I really do hope you put in a Scott/Betsy chapter at some point, you already said she wished she had still been alive to have a chance at scott again. Maybe you can grant that wish later one. Or maybe it would end up being Betsy challenging Emma to see who the top mutant telepathic babe is on the team using scott as a judge.
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From on July 11, 2009
Chapter 3

Well although the Jay/Laurie was okay it was a bit of an odd pairing I felt, given she was dating Josh at the time. Although given her powers, would the virus cause her powers to go into overload? I mean if she's horny all the time then everyone else will and the effect on the mansion should increase. Maybe to the point where everyone is fucking.

Although I have to wonder who will star in this movie that the next character will be making, I'm hoping for X23 as I really hope you do something with them together. I also wonder what happened with Bobby/Rogue and if that led to anything somehow. Plus you did leave Gambit in the cell with a horny Mystique whose to say nothing went on after the other two left?
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From LoverOfEros on June 29, 2009
Ha why the hell does Scooter always go for the bitches? lol Great story! Loves the first... can't wait for more... I'd love to see some where Rogue could get around her power somehow... she's always left out poor thing!
Lots of love,
Hollene
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From marvelmaster616 on June 24, 2009
Another nice chapter with some interesting pairings! Logan and Armor have not exactly had their moments before, but you definitely worked them over here. lol I like how you set it up with the Danger Room. It sounds like the perfect setting for Logan to get involved with anybody. lol And Armor seemed to hold her own even though Logan's probably more the rough kind of lover. I have to wonder how others will react to him. I'm sure the women will have their hands full. lol

The same could be said for Scott. I loved the bit with the Cuckoos dresses. lol That actually sounds like a realistic conversation for them to have. The Cuckoos were never all that modest. And they've been shown to have a sexy side in recent comics. They really showed it here. lol But the best part was Emma offering her own little touch. lol She's quite the demanding type, which isn't surprising given her history. How Scott handles her I have no idea. lol But overall, great job on the scene!

Keep up the good work! Looking forward to more!
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From marvelmaster616 on June 24, 2009
Hey! Great to see you back with another story! You picked up right where you left off. And I can definitely seen an improvement here. Your style has gotten much cleaner and readable. I really like how you set it up with Beast studying that pheromone again. And already it's taking effect. You took a page right out of the comics and got Mystique and Bobby involved. lol Very nicely done! And a good way to start off the first part. Using Rogue a bit as well was also a nice touch. Gave kind of a movie touch to it as well. It made Remy's reaction all the more priceless!

It sounds like you've got a lot of characters to work with here. But since this is taking place in the more recent comics, I'm sort of disappointed because that means we won't get to see Jean involved. I was hoping to see her hook up with some other characters in this like maybe Colossus, Beast, or even Bobby again. lol That's rough because they never should have killed her off in the comics. Plus, I love how you used her in the last fic so I guess I'll have to make due. Bummer.

Overall, good job. Keep up the great work! And thanks for all your support as well.
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