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Reviews for Festival of X

By : marvelmaster616
  • From AgentGv01 on January 06, 2012
    Well the start was a little clumsy with the pure exposition instead of actually kind of going through explaining the changes in more detail. I mean how many people were suddenly couples can give some readers backlash from how quickly it happened. I think a little more time in setting the story up would have helped instead of just rushing through the set up just to get to the story.

    I was expecting more characters to show up and a few I wasn't sure why they were there to begin with like with Domino as I don't remember her being an X-Men all that much so it was a little odd. Plus only three members of the New Mutants show up and only two of the younger generation just seems a little lopsided.

    The sex scenes were okay, a little fast at times which I think it was because you were trying to cover multiple couples, I noticed that when you do that you spend less time on actually detailing out the sex for each couple and instead just to a quick thing on what they're doing. Maybe focus more on less couples to get in more details or just remember to spend more detail on each one might help.

    So it was a little shaky start so I do wonder how the rest of this will go.
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  • From Daye on January 06, 2012
    Not a bad idea for a PWP fic. Still a little clunky in places. You detailed the setting and the timeline changes in your author's notes and then proceed to write paragraphs of exposition of the exact same stuff in the fic itself.

    And the ritual itself. I get why you used the aphrodisiac and all, but did you really have to have the leaders drug them with out their knowledge and before telling them about the ritual. It's a little well sleazy and affects their ability to give consent.

    Still I did enjoy some of the sex; i'd had the same thoughts about Rogue enjoying a position with maximum touching, as well.
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  • From SexyLizard on January 06, 2012
    Awesome story.
    Please continue.
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