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schedule
December 11, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Take this down, get a beta reader, and wait about a month before going ov a final copy, then consider posting it again.
schedule
December 11, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Appropriate capitalization and punctuation are your friends, seriously. This is virtually unreadable, unless you're actually coming in expecting to deal with something written on the level of your average second grader.