rate_review Reviews

I love this fanfic! I've read it a dozen times. I love how Jubilee is in giddy schoolgirl-like awe of Remy.

Nice piece of smut you've got there, but I do have a few little problems. You keep switching your verb usage from past to present tense and back again. You need to pick one and stick to it. You also have a few correctly spelled, but improperly used words. I believe she wanted to 'massage' his sack, not message them. I know it's common practice now, but starting a sentance with the word 'and' shouldn't be done. But like I said, nice smut.