rate_review Reviews

do you not understand English?

You have more than a few errors with grammer and sentence structure, I'm afraid. for example, you use the word 'sweat' when I think you mean 'sweet', 'leaking' instead of 'licking', etc. I would suggest finding a proofreader somewhere, or at least vgoing back and rereading what you wrote very carefully. The general idea behind the story is very good, and you should go with it, but the use of the wrong words made it hard to follow sometimes.