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Reviews for Heat

By : RogueBHS
  • From LaShea on July 08, 2014
    I LOVE this dominating Scott! I don't care who he does it with, this one makes me wish that was me Scott was pounding into! Please keep going with this fic.
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  • From ANON - twisteddoll on July 25, 2013
    Thank you so much for a second chapter. It was an awesome addition to the story. A bit short but it had plenty in it still. I like how you're starting to build more depth to their sexual relationship. While still making it clear that they were friends before and do care for each other. I think the rules for when the playing starts is interesting wouldn't have thought calling her a name would be the green light. Though I understand why Scott going missing is understandably won't someone come looking for Rogue. I just hope you had as much fun writing it as I did reading it.
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  • From ANON - TieDyeJackson on July 09, 2013
    In defence of the author, the subject matter was at my request. It was a challenge fic with the dom/sub flow.

    As far as characterization I don't find it that far fetched. Duncan was an arrogant jock so Lance isn't that far fetched. This is post series with Lance being part of the x-men. Good girls sometimes go for bad boys either in rebellion or thinking they can change them.

    Also, jean was possessive of Scott even when she was with Duncan . He was her backup and a lot of other authors and fans agree. Also with Scott the poor guy was friend zoned for years while the girl he loved dated a jerk who Scott knew he could beat without breaking a sweat but couldn't because with great power comes great responsibility and he was held to a higher standard than any one else, had to always tow the line and be an example, if that isn't a recipe for a sexually deviant dom, I don't know what is.

    As far as Rogue, the whole major plot point was the triangle between the three. She left the brotherhood, whom she joined with encouragement of her only family at the time mind you, not for the cause, not for the x-men, but for Scott. Even look at mutant crush, even though she verbally blasted Scott she was willing to open up about her insecurities to him ... she would have walked through fire to get him to notice her and care for her the way she did for him.

    Finally, it is fan fiction. I'm sure it is pretty OOC for Logan to give Scott a handy but have you seen the sheer volume of Scogan slash out there? It is fan fiction so a little personal bias is par for the course. In Scouge fic, Jean is either called away, leaves or is the villain because in series she was their only road block. Scogue and Jott is like Trekkies and SW geeks, some people like both but when it boils down to it, you gotta pick a side because it's just a natural rivalry

    And that is my two cents.
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  • From Daye on July 08, 2013
    Reviewing this after getting about halfway into the first chapter. And well its not often I find myself agreeing with Agent G on these things.

    No generally I don't mind characters being a bit different in fanfic if it'll help it along. Unless you're using canonships, it's hard to avoid. But generally I'm not a huge fan of character bashing. Yeah Jean needs to be out of the way for Scott/Rogue to happen but she didn't need to pillorised as a lying cheating slut who we all hate. And no Anon, I can't agree that that was her canon evo characterisation. She had two boyfriends in the show, consecutively . That makes her neither a slut or a cheat.

    So the set up basically makes these big chances; Jean's sudden a slut, Scott's suddenly a dom and Rogue's suddenly a submissive and its a big change without the narrative really justifying or dealing with it.

    Now generally I've likes your other two pieces on here but this one doesn't really feel like Scott and Rogue to me as just a random bdsm fic with scott and rogue's name on it. Sorry if this comes of as harsh, just my opinion man. Obviously you should write what you enjoy.
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  • From ANON - Anon on July 08, 2013
    Keep writing. Jean fanboys are just mad you've portrayed her as the slut she is.

    This is hot stuff.
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  • From AgentGv01 on July 07, 2013
    Personally I just didn't like the story when I read this and I'm a bit disappointed it's been turned into more than a one-shot since I think your energy is better used to make other stories.

    Some of the reasons why I I couldn't get into the story was that I didn't like that Jean was cheating on Scott as that's been done to death and the way it was done not only makes no sense at all and comes out of left field but it just seems like your character bashing Jean and I can't stand character bashing, to me it's one of the lowest forms of writing for fanfiction. Plus she cheats on him with Lance of all people, couldn't you have come up with someone that would at least make some kind of sense in the Evo universe? There was never any hint of attraction between them, hell he spent the majority of the series going after Kitty, and all of a sudden she's throwing away a perfectly good relationship for someone like that? What happened between Lance and Kitty then? No mention was made for that and that's one of the things that didn't really make much sense to me since there wasn't much to go on as you kind of rushed through that bit.

    Then we get how to me some of them really act out of character. Most of it I can overlook as it's fanfiction and this originally didn't seem to be too serious but the 'shy Rogue' I never really saw that in the series, hell she openedly flirted a couple of times didn't she like when they were reading Shakespeare? It just seems like your kind of forcing characters to act a certain way without valid reason or background to explain it, only so that the plot can move forward. There is no build up or explanation to why jean was with Lance for instance, and then Scott just makes Rogue his rebound girl just like that? I know he was pissed but that's kind of a douchbag thing to do to a girl to use her only for sex to get back at your girlfriend. Plus him calling her 'angel' all the time was getting annoying for me to read and honestly I don't find it a good nickname for her. One reason is that every time you write it I keep thinking of the actual character with that codename which kind of spoils the scene you're trying to do.

    You could have just had something like Jean had to go to a college out of state and the long distance thing wasn't working and she broke it up so that he wasn't tied down to her and then a few weeks go by and Rogue makes a move on him. Something like that without the cheating and the character bashing so more people could get into it without pissing off fans of certain characters for instance. Or some kind of AU timeline when Scott and Jean never got together or Rogue acted first and finally when she can touch her boyfriend (that part could have used a bit more background for instance) then we get into it. That was just off the top of my head on other ways it could have been done in a nicer way. I wanted to like this as I like the Rogue/Scott relationship in Evo as I felt it was nice and not many stories have her paired up with someone other than Gambit but I couldn't and I just felt that I had to explain in detail why and where I was coming from and what I felt about it.

    You do have talent for better stories I think you just need to stay away from certain things like character bashing and it should improve.
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  • From ANON - twisteddoll10412 on July 05, 2013
    I think your story is great. Maybe you should make it multi chapter. Would love to see what happens next. I hope jean finds out or catches them in bed. That would serve her right.
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