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By : ShiniLuv
  • From ANON - DRK on September 30, 2006
    The story itself is good, well written. There are a few incongruities that would be easily fixable. First, if Charles contacted Emma telepathically, why did he need to call Sean at all? Don't just have something happen because you want it to, make it plausible. If you really wanted Charles to call Sean, then he shouldn't have spoken to Emma first as whoever he talked to would have just told the other. It's not like they could hide a new student.

    Second is that Nightcrawler cannot teleport from upstate NY to Massachusettes. I believe his limit is a mile or so. No matter how much he concentrates, he just can't do it. Even teleporting several times wouldn't work, we're talking about a couple hundred miles at least. Sorry but that's just the way it is.

    Having said all that, I did enjoy the story and thought it needed several more chapters since it reads like the first chapter of a much longer story.
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