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Reviews for The Moments That Make Life Complete

By : Gumballtiger
  • From ANON - Silversmith on August 25, 2005
    Yep, it was the spelling of words in conjunction with Peter's particular accent that threw me a little. :) You mentioned in your notes about it being hard to please readers, but you've got to remember that first and foremost - you must please yourself. Authors are always going to be their own toughest critics, so ultimately we readers can just go take a flying leap somewhere. Fan opinion is important, but remember the first rule of thumb; write a story that YOU would enjoy reading. The rest will take care of itself. (it's nice to know that you welcome constructive criticism though..!)

    Onto the story. Good to know that Peter's patience with Kitty got rewarded in such an enticing way. Having them share a bath was sensual, but not quite as erotic as their night in your story, Surprise. I figured since this is their wedding night, their time together would be written with a little more taste, rather than smut. But smut is fine too, of course! LOL. It's good to see just how much they love one another.

    Pretty cool that they are on a European honeymoon, and that Peter gave Kitty some Matrushka dolls - how very Russian of him. Can't wait to see your last chap.
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  • From ANON - Silversmith on August 16, 2005
    You do a fabulous job of capturing the chemistry between Peter and Kitty. For me, however, the accent that you have Peter use is a bit heavyhanded, even somewhat distracting from the dialogue of your story. I've also noticed a few German, rather than Russian, words used. Spelling could use a little work. Other than that the story looks promising. You have a talent at expressing emotion in a realistic way. Too many stories rely on corny cliches for effect, and thankfully you don't fall into that trap. The romantic scenes between Peter and Kitty are detailed, descriptive, and well written. Nice job. I'm a big Kiotr fan, so I'm definitely eager to read about their wedding night! Hope you post it soon.
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  • From ANON - pink on August 09, 2005
    I absolutely LOVE your stories so much. I really wish there was more kiotr stories out there. You def do the couple justice =) Keep writing girlie.
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  • From on August 07, 2005
    Chapter 4

    Well that was a nice end and I loved how she freaked out at that moment of her wedding that was funny as hell.

    Well anyway I hope you read and review my stuff at some time, and I have to wonder what you come up with next. But if you're going with comic book stuff maybe try doing fics based on that if they have more of that content in it. But that's just my opinion you can just ignore it if you want to.
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  • From on August 07, 2005
    Chapter 2

    Very cute how they got their feelings out like that, although you said he had sex before coming but then why would he be all strange about it? That would mean he had sex at 18 or less and why would it be so important to marry first if he didn't with the other women? that kind of contradiction there.
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  • From on August 07, 2005
    Chapter 1

    Okay you need to learn to say that this is an AU (Alternate Universe) I mean Kitty joined when she was like 16 on the show and there was no Legacy Virus in the cartoon, so you don't have to put it in here. This is the cartoon NOT the comics so you don't have to put comic book elements if you don't want to.

    Interesting first meeting and I loved her reaction to Piotr, that was priceless. How come you put out multiple chapters at one time? Although it does mean less waiting at least lol.

    Oh and there's no Rogue/Logan in this is there? Cause that's to me what Lance/Kitty is to you since it kind of makes Logan not only robbing the craddle but kind of a pedafile going after young girls. I mean he deserves a woman not a girl. I'll read on more later.
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