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By : Masterdudemind

From AgentGv01 on June 19, 2011
I'm not too sure if you're still taking ideas but if you are I might have a few. First off since Page, Maria and Bonita got pregnant they should still be able to produce milk from their breasts. You could have Arcade have them 'milked' daily for special milk drinks he could sell or make the others drink. Even for the next Rahne and Maria scene you could have the guards force Rahne to suck on her nipples until she gets milks and then place milking cones on the other girls tits. Maybe even for Rahne to fuck her with a strap on for their amusement.

Maybe it could even give Arcade an idea to inject needles into all the women's breasts with a chemical that induces lactation so all have morning milking and he could degrade them by calling them cows during it.

For Tigra, how about Craven the Hunter pays for a special hunt and mating. Not only that he wants a true hunters child and one with Tigra and his DNA he thinks would be great. So before Tigra is let loose he injects her with something that causes her body to be immediatly ready and he fucks her a few times to make sure she's pregnant since it only takes her 2 months to get pregnant from the comics apparently.

I'm also wondering if you'll ever go back and extend on the scenes, like the Dani one where she's acting in front of a group, the women with Task Master , Doctor Octopus actually fucking Monet and Narmita. Like maybe he fucks one one his lap while he makes her watch as the other gets two large tentacles in both pussy and ass, etc. I think those scenes were a bit too short and could be extended a bit more if you ever get the time. Hell I'd help out if needed but this is your story after all and I can't wait for more.
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From ANON - Doug on March 31, 2011
Its been a Looonnng time since I've reviewed this, though I have tried to keep up lately.
Item 2: I have Not kept up with the Marvelverse so details from Civil War, Skrull invasion, zombies, Alot of the small stuff from the last several years I'm clusless about.

Someone else has now brought up what might be a consequence of if anyone talks enough or even too much in the wrong place or time, and is overheard. Also, the writer has now offered the best 'chance' as I mentioned in other posts about any Heroes finding out about all this. How? That A.I.M. delivered Ant-man helmet. Way, way back Tony Stark dealt with finding out when his tech was in the wrong hands. Reed Richards (I believe, not sure) has shown more than a few times that safeguards are in place with his. Both Hank and more so with Janet, as her's have evolved With her instead of being just very complex nuts & bolts technology, are or Should be in-tune with those same wavelengths with that helmet. But.... turn that around.
Janet is already a short cute thing in a little black dress, a pair of strappy stiletto heels and a couple baubles dangling from her slender right wrist as she walks from a function at the NY Historical Society, up Central Park West prior to cutting through the Park. Its twilight, the sun having set barely 5 minutes earlier. As she enters the Park she hears a woman's voice in distress, and being the Hero she is, charges in. Willing the change she has done for Years with one part of her mind, but her focus on a person evidently in danger, and following that sound into the trees. Just a few yards off the footpath and she realizes something Very odd. She hasn't changed, and try as she might it Still won't happen.
She feels like.. she is being.. jammed? And such a smell; its formic acid. So strong. She collapses to her knees, its soo strong. She feels a sensation on her legs and across her shoulders. Its raining? Yes, its raining ants from the branches above. Something else in the air, it makes her dizzy. And... horny???
And over the next twenty odd minutes she is teased and enticed and tormented in such a sweeet way.
What is really humiliating though? A WNYW mobile camera crew caught the last 4 minutes or so.
And broadcasted it LIVE.

Our good writer could go either way, and I have said what should be done to Evil. As these other chps have been posted though, I've wondered what would happen to all those thugs, rapists, thieves and murderers if the girls Did somehow win their freedom. Someone else said their hero days Are over, whether from the emotional, spiritual, or any combination of the different Types of damage they have suffered, or from the fact they Would meet just one who had Had them in something mundane as missionary position.
Think back. How Did Frank Castle get started. No, better, WHY?

BTW Agent-G, please keep posting.
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From DrunkenSailor on January 31, 2011
So glad to see an update here. I love this story! Well-written, dark, and with some of my favorite heroines getting full attention. Thank you man, and please keep it up.
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From AgentGv01 on January 03, 2011
you know I had been wondering about this and then suddenly an update. Have to admit the ant thing was a surprise and something I never thought of before or even seen. I wasn't sure if Paige actually could take on other forms so I did some research and it was mentioned she could take on animal forms so I guess other humans is a possibility too (although apparently nothing bigger than her mass)

Although what AIM incident? Was that something that I missed or something?

I have to wonder what you plan for Tigra, will she be given choices to help Arcade with the women or he told to take part in it. I could see him do something like blindfolding one of the women and ordering Tigra to torture and rape them as he records it as leverage. Plus her own humiliations as well as it was evident she doesn't get any free passes.

I also wonder from the Cathy and Dallas fight in chapter 3, was the the only time the women were forced against each other? If so or not is there hard feelings between people like Cathy and Dallas or will they get their own little treatments?
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From archon1980 on November 30, 2010
Are you going to continue? I hope so.
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From archon1980 on September 23, 2010
Great story. Are you going to continue? I hope to see more of this amazing story soon. Arcade is one sick bastard, I love it.
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From ANON - Anon on November 21, 2009
Good to see you back at it!
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From ANON - killakam on October 25, 2009
Don't really have that much to say except great story and keep up the good work. If I can make a request I would ask for more stomach expansion please. Again thank you for a great story.
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From on October 07, 2009
I hoep you're still taking ideas, I just had one for Monet/Paige/Amara you can have all three of them having to entertain a group of FOH members. Also do Paige, Bonita and Maria still have milk filled breasts from when they gave birth in chapter 2? If so you can use that in the Monet/Paige/Amara idea mainly that one member is fucking Paige and squeezes her breasts hard enough for milk to leak out and they force Monet and Amara to suck it all out of each breasts while fucking them. Also since Paige can heal from mostly any damage by ripping off her skin she can take a lot more abuse and heal instantly. I've seen her gutted and then she was fine when the skin was ripped off.

So I can see the FOH members going to town on those two since they would want to hurt them as much as fuck them, for Monet they would get more creative given her invulnerability. Like using baseball bats as dildos or something, maybe tying a rope around her breasts and hanging her from them and all sorts of things.
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From on September 09, 2009
I hope for the next chapter you focus on Tigra and Monet as I really want to see more of those two.
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From on September 04, 2009
Didn't notice the update for the chapter 10 the part 2, although I am surprised by how short it was that is the shortest chapter you've ever done. I know fast updates are nice but I can wait a bit longer if it means you'll make longer chapters. This honestly I think can be pasted into the last chapter or maybe it should be put into the end of part 1 as it feels like it should have been a part of the previous chapter.

I was wondering about the Taskmaster when you mentioned him but I forgot to ask last time, I shouldn't be surprised he's using them to train his students. Although I bet the odds are stacked against the women I would think a part of them actually take a small amount of pleasure as this is the only time they can fight back and would fight a lot harder given all the things they've been through.

Although I am interested to see what the others are going through at the moment. Plus with all the men and women doing this there has to be a few that will be stupid enough to say something. I can just see some like the wrecking crew going drinking after and bragging. If so you could use this to bring in other new female characters to break, like they find the place but get captured. But that's just an idea. I can also see that any friendships with some would be very strained. As like we saw some would do anything to avoid punishment like in that one chapter when they had to fight and rape the other to win. I have to wonder if we'll see any rivalries or something in the next chapter to be shown.

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From dbud on August 25, 2009
Just found this story even though it appears to have been started years ago. I would rate this A+. Very cool idea. I had forgotten about Arcade but he is the perfect villian for this type of story. i am still reading the chapters but am very interested in where it goes.

My only criticism is that you don't seem to focus on the women's speech and quotes enough. Meaning, you will say that a certain characcter screams as she is whipped or fucked, but instead it would be better to actually type out what she says. Just a thought and obviously since I am reading chapters from several years ago, not much you can do now and maybe you have done more of this in newer chapters.
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From on August 24, 2009
wow, I didn't expect that fast of an update, I think that's the fastest time you did that I didn't expect another one until months from now. So I see that you skipped ahead time wise and now we see them all broken. Even if they are rescued (which I have no idea if they ever will or not) they're hero days are over at this point. There would be no way for them to not run into villains that have already had them in Arcade's park. Plus I doubt they could even go out as heroes as they would be too afraid of something like this happening again.

But it's unique to see how the days go with them, and we see how Arcade keeps them in health was a good touch as most would forget about that kind of thing. The birth control would explain why now one (besides those three in chapter 2) have gotten pregnant yet, but that won't last forever and I bet its just another little game of Arcade to make them wonder when it will happen when it does. Not sure if you'll update as fast again but I do wonder how the others are coping with things as we've seen mostly from Maria's viewpoint and a bit of Dani's. Although would Tigra still be the 'spy' in the group after all this time or will we see her telling Arcade something like someone has a plan to get out at some point?
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From on August 23, 2009
I have to admit I didn't expect that with Dagger, I think that was the most irony any of the women have gone through, I mean she protects that area and now you see how it effects to those that knew the people that were sent to jail because of her actions. SO after all this time you finally got through them all once, now I have to wonder how the next round will be, as many have already been broken but not all I would think. Although one thing, does Arcade have something to heal them after all that, because some of the stuff they have gone through would pretty much make them useless for awhile. Anyways I can't wait to see the next chapter now, will you go the same women in the same order or will you mix it up a bit now?
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From ANON - Anon2006 on December 16, 2008
Still waiting with anticipation. You haven't used Dagger yet. I expect she'll be next. Please update soon.
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