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Reviews for Playing with Fire

By : taekwondodo

From ANON - morgannia on October 16, 2003
hmmmm yeah formattingues ues definitely suck, it's a little distracting but not a particularly big deal for me, anyway. but i have to ask you are you planning on not making this a a Kutty? (lowering my head in shame) i was just re-reading the story & read the author notes in the 1st chapter (if they were there all along, i somehow breezed completely through it) & noticed that bit. You're an amazing writer & i'll continue to read this story no matter what (becuase you've got me completely hooked) but if it winds up not being a a Kurtty, i'll be so dissapointed. i actually wasn't a Kurtty fan until i found this story & now i'm completely converted, unforunately while there are more than a few Kurtty stories around, thiory ory is by far the best. i even made my friend who loves the x-men & Kurt, but hates x-men:evo read it, because i thought it was so good. please, please, please if it's at all possible please keep it at least semi-Kurtty or maybe just Kurtty lurking in the background? i just see so many possiblities for it in this story (you wouldn't image the variety of plot bunnies i have floating in my head just from what you've laid out so far). it's you story, of course, so do what you like, but that is just my opinion.

~~~ laura
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From ANON - Lindsey on October 16, 2003
I like it. It's a little on the drawn out side, not not too much so. The German is pretty good, but it would be spelled and said "Komm hier!" since it's a command (I'm in Deutsch IV (German 4) now so *ner* lol). I can't wait for the next chapters to surface. You've got quite a good story unfolding. You get 2 gold stars by your name on the board!
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From ANON - bluefooted on October 15, 2003
All right, all right! I know we all write and draw because, on some level, we feel compelled to ce are art just for the sake of it. On another, more important level, we want to get feedback for the things we do. Particularly because, creatively, I feed off of the works of others - gotta get that inspiration somewhere. So, since I've been reading and very much enjoying this story, it's only fair that I take a little time to give you some thoughts. God knows, you've given me feedback on my stuff many times :) (thanks!). And I'll put it here (rather than on ff.net) cause you were lamenting the lack of reviews. Here goes:

This is exactly the sort of story that I love to read! You've taken these very one-dimensional cartoon characters (kid's show, so how can they have dark pasts?) and given them a wonderful sense of presence and weight. I tend to be very visual when I'm reading. For most Evolution-based fics that I read I picture the characters pretty much as they appear in the cartoon - flat and, well, cartoony. When reading this, however, I find that they've become more real. The pasts you've given them, being able to eavesdrop on their thoughts and fears, these give them a greeelieeling of depth. It makes it so easy for me to see them as real beings - in appearance as well as character. Kurt, for instance, is no longer just a plain, smooth blue. I can almost see the short, shiny fur on his face and the way it catches the light, the longer fur on his arms and back, sort of ruffling in the wind just a bit. What I'm trying to say, in my own warped way, is that your story is live-action for me, that's how well-visualized it is. Thrilling - makes me want to keep drawing!

As for the length and the amount of detail - they are great! In fact, I don't know why anyone would object if you put even more in. Go for it! I want to know exactly what they're thinking - every little worry, fear, hope, etc. I want to know why they do the things they do, how their pasts influence the choices they make in the story. It just feels right and I'm a sucker for details and long reads. So tired of fics that just barely scratch the surface and leave me wondering 'why did he/she/it do that?' Well, that's my two cents or so. Thanks for entertaining us so wonderfully! Bluefooted

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From ANON - morgannia on October 15, 2003
ok, you want more reviews here, you've got it. lol, i owe you anyway, since my review on fanfiction.net was so light. first, i've gotta say how much i LOVE your story, i've read it at least five times thus far & each time just gets better. adding the translations right after the German is something you definitely need to keep, it doesn't break the flow at all & is actually really helpful. one thing, i'm really enjoying in particular is your characterizations of Logan, Kitty & Kurt, you get the reader directly into their heads & the emotional intensity is amazing.

hmmmm, so you want actual criticism? i'm trying . . . lol, this is based on later chapters posted over on ffn - you've become italicisng thoughts which is good, but you also at times italisedtaintain words in the character's speech, perhaps bolding would be better? also, i'm pretty sure somewhere along the way (ah ha, just found it) "Zur Holle mit Steuerung" in chapter 13 was never translated, i looked it up myself. Logan especially in chapter 14, seems a bit ooc, i would have expected him to be a bit harsher on Kurt, likewise i was surprised by Kurt's comment to him about "eating something" also seemed ooc in light of his earlier reactions to having sex with Kitty - i understand that circumstance have obviously changed, but to say that in front of Logan? it was a bit bold. other than that, my biggest criticism is having to wait for the latest chapter, lol - i've spent more than a few hours mentally writing the next chapter is my head, but this is your vision & i really want to see your treatment of it. also i'll be checking this site regularly as well, waiting for the lemon you couldn't post on ffn. oher than that - you've written an amazing multi-layered story that i'm feinding for more of. hope to see the next chapter very soon.
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From ANON - jessie b on October 14, 2003
your story is great, it's one of those stories you just can't stop reading, don't stop writing you're a wonderful writer

keep it up :)
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From ANON - foof76 on October 14, 2003
This is a great story, I'm really getting hooked. And I have to admit, I'm a total lemon junkie, and I usually just surf around looking for good lemons. (A plot helps, but I'm not picky!) So usually I'm clicking on by now, tired of waiting for the payoff, but I have to say that this is a wonderfully written, engrossing story! But I do have to give you mad props for the extremely steamy first chapter, and I have to say that I'm praying for a hot Kurtty lemon before this is done! Although, I'm sure I will love it even if there't 't one. (LEMON, LEMON, LEMON, LEMON!)
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From on October 14, 2003
I have been reading Playing With Fire here as well as at fanfiction.net. I just didn't know if you wanted me to re-review. You know I love this story. It's the best Kurt fic on ff.net. Well...that I've found anyway. I haven't read every Kurt fic because some of them I open, see all the errors and can't bear to continue. Your story is detailed, carefully checked for spelling and grammatical, and the characters act like they're supposed to. I will gladly continue to review here if you like. Obviously people have at least looked over it because it has received 2769 hits. Some people just aren't comfortable with letting others know they read stories with 'mature content'. But I do agree with you. There is such a thing as anonomous reviewing. I on the other hand have no problem with letting others know what I read. If it's good I'll give the author a shout, if not...I'll bite my tongue or try and gently help. But you don't need heYouYou're doing a great job.
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From ANON - More More on October 14, 2003
More! I want MORE!
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From Nemain on October 10, 2003
STRAWBERRIES! LOL...ds fds familiar, neh? LOL. And I am now offically an addict to your fic. *G*

PS Erotica...I like it... LOL.
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From Nemain on October 09, 2003
Have I told you how much I love this story? *sigh* Soooooooo much...
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From Nemain on September 28, 2003
I'm still *loving* this story! And I just wanted to let you know re: your review that Kurtty is returning in ch. 40 onward! I promise! :)
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From ANON - Adam Christensen on September 28, 2003
This is the kind of review you wade through endless amounts of shitty one paragraph stories to see. An excellent work. I hope to seee more very soon. +++++
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From ANON - Tergon on September 27, 2003
Greetings and salutations, TKD!!!

Oh, yes. Oh, very much yes. I absolutely love this fic. Love, love, LOVE!
There's sort of the yes-and-no Kurtty going on, Logan's getting all concerned about Kurt and trying not to show it, the Anti-mutant propaganda is growing...
You have to write more. Understand me? You have to.
I will beg, if that's what you're going to reduce me to. I will do whatever I must to get yo fin finish posting this fic. Please, please, please, please...

I await more. Pleeeeeeeeez?

Yours hyperactively,
Tergon
With additional greetings from Selexor the singing platypus.
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From on September 27, 2003
I'm really enjoying this story, especially the characterisations, and I like that it doesn't have a 'rushed' feel to it. Please continue! (No pressure though, 'cause I know *exactly* how hard it can be writing with kids running around:) ) Oh, and on the formatting - some versions of Word have an option under File> Save As HTML. Does yours have that? Very quick and easy :)
Cheers,
Apteryx
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From Nemain on September 24, 2003
Wow. I like this a lot! Finally, someone else with Kurtty tendencies! :) More, please!
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