I'll be honest I didn't expect you to end it after five chapters I know you'll be doing more but is that how this story will be? Done in parts and was it only five chapter because it was kind of the prologue to it or was it just how it worked out? I'm guessing that since the chapter ended two years later (I take it that was because in Limbo time doesn't work the same given what happened with Iliyana) the next story will pick up either 2 years later as well give or take.

Well, I for one would like to see how you have them deal with the Inferno event for one. Though on a side note I hope that you have them save Laura and her mother and have her join the Academy X kids because I would like to see you hook Laura and Julian before he met Sofia is possible.

Also would like to see them help Rogue with her powers and maybe have a threeway along the way.

Thanks for the story.

Well I can see Jean and Scott are still going at it like rabbits lol. It does make me wonder, at this point in time there are things like Havok being still thought of as dead, Rogue would still be on the Brotherhood of Mutants team (most likely might not have run in with Ms Marvel at ths moment) and a few other things. I'm curious what they plan on doing I mean they got images of the future, maybe the time is now to start to work on what they remember.

As for the Emma scene yeah I was actually like with Emma expecting the goblins to rape her, I guess watching/reading Goblin Slayer and a few other works similar made me think of goblins like that normally. Although I might have had Emma struggle a bit more, she's a strong woman after all.

Maybe have her still somewhat defiant at the end but with Madalyne smirking with a 'Then let's see how long you can keep that up after a week" leaving the scene with a very unsure Emma but that's just me.

well finally caught up with chapter 3, so we get a bit of flashback to explain the new Goblin Queen although I thought she had to make a deal with the demons of Limbo for that kind of power or was that just from her soul being born from Limbo? Maybe a little clarity at some point to explain how she can suddenly control those goblin like creatures so quickly might help.

I see more Jean and Scott exploring things have to wonder who and what else they'll do. I don't know if you thought of it but wasn't the Grey Hulk (Mr. Joe Fixit) working Las Vegas for a time with that other female character Marlow (Rick Jones's future wife/ex-wife). In fact I think they slept together once when she didn't know he was the Hulk.

Also Emma and the rest of the Inner Circle are captured although from the sounds of things at the end and the next chapter title and that Limbo is basically a hell dimension I have to wonder if her plan is to torture and/or rape Emma into submission alone with the rest of them to force them under her control.

So from the second chapter I gathered that Jean and Scott will be in an open relationship with all of this. A part of me does wonder how much is them and how much is the Phoenix influencing them and others through them too. It would be an interseting question to explore if that's what your doing.

So I take it that this Pryor is goig to be something totally different than what we've seen as I bet the souls that Belasco has access to is either demonic in nature or evil soulds or even a patchwork of both put into the clones body.

well this first chapter is off to an interesting start. I do wonder how much of their futures they remember, was it only bits and pieces like the important parts for example. If so they could use that to help them deal with some future threats before they happen at least in the short term before the timeline changes too much.

One major change would be that without the Phoenix going nuts and blowing up a planet the Shi'ar Empire won't even know about them or that the Phoenix Force is on Earth at least not anytime soon. Plus they would have no reason to put Jean on trail, kill her family years later and other things. Although that might mean Lillandra's brother would still be on the throne for some time to come.

I also wondered why Mandalyne Pryor has been the only clone in Marvel comics to have needed Jean to have been taken out of action to 'wake up'. Hell the Jackel (Miles Warren) made cloning look easy with the number of times he did it.

I can see this being the start of another epic story like the Red Queen.  Never thought of the potential for this kind of scenario since usually the Phoenix Force is rarely a helpful kind of cosmic power for long.  Hope to see the new chapter for this soon.