Reviews for ValkyrieBy : Juliette |
I honestly do not particularly impressed by the character of Thor, or his sudden "love" for mortal woman he barely knows (or his "change" if to think), and so I think that Thor could do what he did. But for the life of mine, I don't and just can't believe that Loki so easily accepted (obvious empty) assurances from the woman whose inconstancy he seen his own eyes just moments earlier (along with the woman herself). With his brother (in comparison with which Loki always felt as inferior, second-best, a spare. And she just proved it again).
"Your brother and I have a past. You and I do as well. They intertwine. You are here, he is not."
Yeah riiight! And then she comes out in the garden or somewhere, where at the moment Thor is present and not Loki, and then Loki again will be forgotten...
I'm afraid the last two chapters killed my sympathies to your character. Hopefully Loki still has enough brain and pride, to refuse to pick up Thor's scraps. He deserves much better than the narcissistic woman who gives her body to anyone who wishes (probably because there is nothing more to give).
And please do not misunderstand me. I do not in any way trying to flame you and your story. Such a vigorous reaction due to certain character and no more.
I am very excited to find out the continuation: I really hope that Loki just said goodbye to her.
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