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By : AgentGv01

From redsliver on March 04, 2014
Another interesting chapter. She-Hulk's post coital advice is my personal highlight. Love anything Spider-man of course.

You could stand to benefit greatly from a proofreader. There are ubiquitous small errors that really need cleaning up before this moves from a pretty good story to a great one.
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From marvelmaster616 on March 04, 2014
Nice new chapter, my friend. I enjoyed it. Plus, it was extra long and had an additional scene with Reed/Sue, which felt like a nice bonus. lol I mean why should Peter have all the fun anyways? lol Glad to see Aphrodite show up again. Interesting how she manipulates the passions of others, even when it's not directly related to Peter. Sue never really comes off as overly sexual, but I can see her having a sexy side that she reserves for private moments. So I think you handled that nicely.

But I love what you did with She-Hulk. I can definitely see her liking it rough. lol Given her durability and strength, I think that might be necessary for her to get the sensations she wants. That hair pulling was an interesting bit though. She really seemed to get off on that. Guess that's her thing. Same with the dirty talk. I think she was the dirtiest talker to date and in a good way. lol I'm sure Peter isn't used to that, but if you have She Hulk show up again I'm sure he'll get into it. Definitely one of your more unique scenes and very nicely done.

I also liked the little recap at the beginning that showed how Peter is still interacting with all these other women. I think that's a nice touch because it shows it's not just some passionless one night stand. These girls are acting like they're hooked on him, which may be the point I guess. I wonder how much of that is Aphrodite's doing and how much of that is Peter's. That would be something interesting to explore. As for other pairings, I'm sad to hear Emma won't be showing up. I think she could use a guy like Peter after her breakup with Scott. I know it hasn't happened yet in your timeline, but it would have been a nice touch. And if I had to vote, I would go with Jessica Drew. Maybe have her show up after Black Widow. As for others, I'm not sure how young you're willing to go with the girls. Maybe X-23 or vampire Jubilee could show up. But I'm not sure you'll want to do that. Maybe that's something for another story. Overall, still a great job. I'm really enjoying this story. Every chapter is worth waiting for. Keep up the great work, my friend!

MarvelMaster616
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From AnansiScribe on March 04, 2014
It's getting hotter and hotter, and I honestly think this is my most favorite of the chapters you've put up so far for this story. For one, you make Reed not look like a complete asshole; inattentive and oblivious he may be a lot of the time, but he does love his family deeply and tries his best to make time to show them how much. Glad for that, even if I'd have liked to see Sue and Jen talk about Lyra, and I would've recommended Peter/Lyra if he were the same age as her, considering her whole thing at the beginning was finding this time's greatest hero and bearing powerful offspring by him --- and we all know who Marvel's greatest hero is. Speaking of Jen, loved not just the sex between her and Peter, but also her advice to Peter on enjoying life as it comes instead of feeling guilty and afraid all the time because of what he thinks others may think of him.

Oh, and if you're thinking about a spider-themed heroine for Peter to pair up with besides Julia Carpenter and not necessarily Jessica Drew, could you be referring to the Black Widow? They did have a certain level of chemistry in that Marvel Team-Up arc where she relapsed into one of her cover identities after severe torture and fell in love with Spider-Man while he was trying to protect her. Widow quickly put the kibosh on that once she regained her sense of self, even though she admitted to herself that she did feel a certain pull toward Spidey, denying it because she felt love had no place in her life.

Also, judging by the teaser title "The Mercenary" at the end, I'm guessing the next chapter is going to be Silver Sable, perhaps taking off from the two-issue arc before Ends of the Earth in which Spider-Man saved New York from a bomb while Silver was visiting on a diplomatic envoy and she showed her gratitude with a kiss. Could be interesting, and by the way, it's Victoria Hand, not Maria Hand. Been loving this story so far and looking forward to reading more of it when it comes.
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From ANON - Ratdogtwo on March 04, 2014
I vote for yah to add Jessica drew. another awesome chapter
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From ANON - SpiderMan on January 13, 2014
I was thinking Emma Frost would have shown up. She did apparently spend some time around Peter in a school setting.

Maybe add her after a breakup with Scott?
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From Shadow-Of-The-Guardian on December 21, 2013
I like the choice for the mutant that becomes intimate with Peter. Kitty was a good choice but using Rogue was just as good of a choice. A woman that repressed will definitely need an outlet and with the abilities Peter has is practically the perfect match for her. Though Rogue is no doubt unaware of Peter's other girls in his life, I can see her not really hating the fact that she might have to share Peter considering the fact of the level of orgasms he can give her.

But Peter is becoming aware of the fact that something is a bit off since even he knows a man doesn't get that many women in their life without some kind of x-factor that's working in his favor. I'm curious to see if he'll figure it out in time or if he'll stop questioning it and go with the flow of the women's lust juices.

If the next woman is who I think, the next one to be introduced into Peter's harem, Peter might either think of what a way to go or maybe he knows something is definitely off. I am also deeply curious what the Love Goddess has planned for Peter. She maybe having fun but the fun of a god tends to have very grave consequences for all those involved. Can't wait for the next chapter.
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From ANON - Kylerocks01 on December 21, 2013
Nice chapter, have to admit when you titled it 'The Mutant' I thought it would be Kitty. That's another thing, when you introduced everyone they acted like they met for the first time, I thought the X-men (most of them anyway) knew who Spider-Man was.

Uh oh, since I know this isn't a slash fic the lawyer can only be She-hulk, I can honestly say I am looking forward to that chapter, I have always been a fan of the unusual pairings.

If you are taking requests for girls then how about Storm (Ororo Munroe), Spider-Woman (Jessica Drew) and Silver Sable.

Well keep up the good work and I am looking forward to you updating this and when you get around to your Justice League Spider continuation story on FF.net.
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From redsliver on December 21, 2013
Another great chapter, Rogue is always a great subject for erotica. I'm glad it wasn't Kitty to be honest, although I am hoping Pete will have someone he can geek out with eventually.

I like your writing but there are a few places where I question your word choice:
Peter offered although he was pretty sure his boss would love to have Hank McCoy working here even if it was just now and then.

Would probably read a little better as:
Peter offered. He was pretty sure his boss would love to have Hank McCoy working here even if it was just now and then.

As much as your hints for the next woman interest me, I'm looking forward to these women overlapping. There's some great history and static between MJ and Felicia or Carol and Rogue that would be interesting to explore. I always find Spider-man's at his scatterbrained best when there are multiple women vying for his affection.
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From ANON - Harbinger of Kaos on December 21, 2013
Well despite the wait this was good, though I don't think MJ would be mad since this was her idea when she said they could be FWB's. Carol may have some issues, especially with Rogue, though this just makes me wonder if you won't have Peter get between the two and help them work it out before they decided to get to know each really well in the bedroom. So Jen? Well she did find him attractive during his black suit period, we still got Silver on the wings though I hoping you do give a Natasha a chance since despite the circumstances there was something there and I feel Peter would be good for her... I mean if the Devil wants your marriage than clearly the girl who gets with him is very lucky.
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From marvelmaster616 on December 20, 2013
Another great chapter my friend. Always worth the wait! Nice to see you switching up the locations as well. Peter getting a little something while at work was a nice touch. I also like how you set it up with a field trip by the Jean Grey Institute. That actually sounds like something that could happen in the comics at some point. lol I also like how you touched on some of Rogue's romantic history. She actually hasn't had a lot of sexual experience, her powers not withstanding. Peter definitely has more experience on her, especially lately. And I can see her being somewhat overwhelmed by his skill, especially if she hadn't done it in a year like you mentioned. It was nice and basic, just the kind of thing you might expect from a quickie at work. lol It was fun and nicely done. Also like how you're adding a bit more detail into each chapter in terms of setting the scene up. That may seem secondary, but it definitely helps bring the chapter together. It may take longer, but it shows in the final product. Now it sounds like he'll be getting a shot at She-Hulk. That should be an interesting experience and an interesting test of strength. lol I'm looking forward to it my friend. Keep up the excellent work!

MarvelMaster616
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From Shadow-Of-The-Guardian on September 21, 2013
I definitely like the latest chapter you've posted. I like the situation that you put Carol and Peter in and how it went from there. I also like how Aphrodite was enjoying the whole situation from afar while enjoying from pleasure for herself. Overall, I like how this story is progressing and I can't wait to see who Peter becomes involved with next. Though you've hinted it's a mutant, the list of women that would go great with Peter, just on mutants alone, the mind just wonders who it will be. I know you may not think it's possible but I would like to se X-23 be with Peter, not in a serious relationship but uses Peter as an outlet from time to time.

Overall, can't wait to see what you've got planned next for this story.
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From JViper on September 18, 2013
I'm liking this story more and more. Maybe it's because you're one of the few writers to write Carol/peter and I have a soft spot for them. But the quality of all the chapters is undeniable and each girl gets the spotlight just right. I can't wait to see who else is gonna feature. Keep it up the great work.
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From marvelmaster616 on September 08, 2013
Great chapter, my friend. You're probably the only one who incorporates Miss Marvel into stories like this and does it in a way that makes sense. lol It seems from this chapter that the spell Aphrodite put on Peter is getting stronger. Miss Marvel clearly couldn't explain why she was so turned on, but she didn't seem to care and neither did Peter. But it's getting to the point where they're clearly noticing. It's always fun to add a nice shower scene into the mix. It can be awkward, funny, and steamy in all the right ways. lol I like that you switched it up to the bed as well. It is kind of strange that Peter hasn't been with a woman who has superpowers. With his strength, I can't help but wonder if holding back is really frustrating to him. But he didn't have to hold back with Miss Marvel and it showed. Another great job, my friend! Keep up the excellent work. I'm looking forward to the next issue, which I assume is Rogue. That should be a lot of fun! Take care, my friend.

MarvelMaster616
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From ANON - qwerty on July 09, 2013
Ok so I read through the forum story discussion topic...

What about Firestar? I believe she broke up with Justice before One more Day, plus she's a Spider Friend.

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One way to work Jessica Drew into the story is right after Ms Marvel since they are friends (Spider-Woman saved Ms Marvel when she had her powers siphoned off by Rogue). I can't remember the specifics but they were roomies at one point... Just imagine the possibilities.

As for villainesses/female villains, this is tougher since they aren't as famous as the dudes in Spidey's rogue gallery. So maybe you could work it so that Aphrodite sees it as a personal challenge i.e. turning hatred into attraction to balance the scales. Also, Aphrodite can be quite vindictive when she feels slighted or feels jealous of mortals and she resorts to humbling/shaming them like with Pasiphae & The White Bull.
Suggestions:
- Lady Octopus/Carolyn Trainer
- Stunner
- Titania (during the Secret Wars, she gets humbled by Spider-Man, and has been wary of him ever since)
- Superia -- not an actual Spidey villain but she's a well-known hater of males, has been known to hire female villains as part of her Femizons, and is arrogant

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From ANON - sh8ad8ow on July 01, 2013
Great story so far can�t wait to see who is next and if he will start to get suspicios of something strange going on with him soon. Also I would like to see him with Spider-woman too.
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