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Reviews for Spider's Web Trilogy - The Spider's Bite

By : Shadow-Of-The-Guardian

From Ratdogtwo on June 26, 2013
Another great couple of chapters. Keep up the great work/
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From Ratdogtwo on June 26, 2013
Never thought MJ as tigra before but I got to say that it works and I like it. Keep up thr awesome job.
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From Zecht on June 25, 2013
great fic. I love it :)
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From DSTorres on June 23, 2013
A sexually charged (sorry, couldn't help myself) update. Keep up the great work and can't wait to see what happens next.
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From DSTorres on June 23, 2013
Very cool chapter. Again, its your story, your timeline, you guide what happens not Marvel or any other writer. I am very curious how Jessica Drew's story will play out as we know how 1610 Jessica Drew came about. On to the next chapter!!!
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From AgentGv01 on June 23, 2013
Well I just finished chapter 8 and I was pretty confused timeline wise given how you wrote certain parts like Peter said this was the first time when he had anal sex when we saw it in the previous chapter. So most of the way through I thought that you messed up in the order of posting this story until I saw at the very end about Jessica mentioned. I think if you're going to skip around like this you have to say you are somehow as it's poorly done in this. You have to make it clear when a scene takes place before another, so either remember that for the future or just from now on keep your story more linear.

Most of the chapter was well done with showing him slowly breaking them down with the use of venom and pleasure to make him come to his way of thinking. The only major problem other than the timeline mess up is that the ending is really rushed through. I would have liked to have seen that actual scene as Peter somehow convinced them not to steal anymore although what will they do for cash now is the question. Since he now has to take responsibility for that as well.

So I do wonder how that issue will get resolved with them and also I bet pretty soon we're going to have to see Peter together with them all as he explains a few things to everyone which I can't see everyone going to be happy about.
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From AgentGv01 on June 23, 2013
Well I just finished chapter 7 and it was a nice intro to Jessica although I would have liked a bit more build up to her like actually see the interview when they drugged her and events around that as I bet a girl that goes missing would get around Peter's school and such. Plus if Jessica thinks that they will look for her then what about her parents after all they had to have put out a missing person's and they got to be worried sick. Where will Jessica stay hidden all this time until she can actually go home and when she can what kind of story can they tell her parents as I doubt they could just tell the truth.

It was a little odd how Peter was so suspicious about her if he was still reeling from what happened last chapter I think that should have been brought up a little just to ensure that point got across. Plus did he know about the fire and why did he assume that she spread the fire on purpose? I'm also unsure about the whole her drinking blood thing as that's kind of more like Morbius.

I'm also surprised she didn't freak out as much when she just killed a guy and drank his blood I think she should have thrown up and freaked out a lot more even if he was a piece of scum that had it coming as something like that wouldn't be easy to just do normally. Anyways the sex scene was a bit different and unique for the pair which is always good and I liked how it was a bit realistic how her first times hurt instead of instantly great. Although given that he came inside of her in a dangerous day that she even warned him about will that mean she just got knocked up? I'm also wondering how she'll deal when she wakes up to realize not only what happened but that she might have just gotten herself pregnant.
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From Ryvius on June 23, 2013
Didn't expect to see Jessica Drew in this fic, but she's an awesome addition. Like all the details about what was done to her and how she escaped while figuring out her powers and such. Not really a fan of the her intentionally killing part, but it's certainly understandable given what the bastard attempted to do to her along with her dealing with her new instincts and all.

I don't normally mention these things, but I noticed a lot of spelling errors or sentence's missing words this chapter. Might want to go and fix those when you have the time.

Great update, on to the next chapter!
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From ANON - Ron on June 11, 2013
I love it all I just can't look away I can't wait to see what happens next and what happens between them next please when update send me a massage my email is kingofmonsters1@gmail.com send it right away please and it would be awesome if Liz are one of the other's turn into a wolf please that would be awesome beyond awesome
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From Ryvius on May 25, 2013
So the thing with the Bombshells was awesome, from the fight to the chase to the way Peter deals with them. All of it very entertaining.

So~, MJ turned into Tigra? Can't say I saw that coming. Still, it's a very interesting idea, and I'm very much looking forward to what might happen with the other ladies.

Wonder who the new character will be?

Excellent work! I look forward to more!
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From Ryvius on May 25, 2013
I liked the start of the chapter, with Natasha obsessing over Spider-Man due to being bitten and the conversation between her and Fury, thought it was pretty well thought out. Can't wait for Black Widow to join in on the action.

Was kinda weird for me seeing Gwen and Kong here, as I'm not very familiar with their Ultimate versions.

Good work so far, on to part 2.
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From AgentGv01 on May 25, 2013
Well I just finished chapter 6, I liked the thing with the Bombshells I never got any issues with them before so this I think is the first time I've seen anyone actually use those two characters. Plus with Peter experimenting on how to use his venom was a good idea and I can see this being used on others like Black Cat later on. I can only wonder how weird things will be between that mother and daughter later, in fact I'd like to see a scene when they wake up and deal with the after match of it all before meeting with Peter.

The part at the end with MJ turning into Tigra I was waiting for and it certainly was well worth the wait as I can't wait to see how she deals with things especially freaking out if she's stuck looking like that and how she'll explain things if she's stuck. The only thing I think you should add in how in the world would Peter know all about how the bombshells got their powers from a laptop? That didn't make any sense unless you go back and add in that he found the girl's diary that she wrote in it or something as that would make more sense in how he figured it all out.
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From AgentGv01 on May 25, 2013
Nice two updates so I'll give a review for each chapter this one is for chapter 5 part 1. I liked the start of this with Black Widow as she's looking into Peter, I had completely forgotten that he had already bitten her (I went back to quickly look over the scene again to refresh my memory) so it stands to reason she would be effected somehow and I like how you are dealing with her slowly being obsessed with him and her pleasuring herself and fantasizing too.

I remember the impact webbing from Ben Reily used when he was Scarlet Spider I/Spider-Man in 616 but the tazer webbing I have no idea where you got that from. The impact webbing I think would be the most doable.

I liked Gwen's little scene in this chapter and how the girls got jealous of him looking at another woman and their way of reminding him not to stray too far although I get the feeling those too might have to start laying some ground rules for him and other women soon. I liked the sex scene at the end of this as it was a very unique three way, from experience I know how hard it can get to write with more than just two people involved sometimes. Although that Liz saw his fangs will she bring that up later maybe while girl talking with MJ about their sex life together?
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From ANON - Nerdman3000 on April 07, 2013
Yay! New Chapter. Very well done, and I like Liz and Mary Jane with Peter. Can't wait for Gwen Stacey, Black Cat, Black Widow, and Silver Sable to show up. Those four I really want to see. Keep up the good work and please post the new chapter sooner.
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From credfield75 on April 06, 2013
A very well written and sexy update! As this is fan fiction it is quite all right to move events around. It's your universe, not 1610 (which DIsney owns right?).

Keep up the good work and I eagerly await your next update.
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