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Reviews for Spider's Web Trilogy - The Spider's Bite

By : Shadow-Of-The-Guardian

From ANON - Soulhope: the wolf on January 07, 2015
nice chapter it seems like grown up peter of 616 is talking to ultimate mutate spider-man to get him to grow up a bit. when is peter going to find out he is immortal thanks to oz and are his girls going to be as well? im looking into it but aren't the ultemint mutants just offshoots of the ultimat version of weapons plus program.
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From AgentGv01 on January 05, 2015
Well the chapter started out really nice with the lesbian three way going on with Jess,Lori and Lana. It makes me wonder what other toys that she might be hiding out in her room that we'll see later or maybe this will give them a taste to get some new toys to play with after all Peter can't be with them all the time when they need a certain itch to be scratched.

I didn't expect such a big monologue between the nurses not sure if this was you commenting on some personal views you wanted to get out there or something. Although this did give us a peek that Mary is in fact totally insane now which I bet will get further along later in the story for more development like a deeper look into her mind at a later point in the story.

The last part I wasn't a fan of, maybe if it a dream that would make more sense but hallucinations just makes him look crazy to me.
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From AnansiScribe on January 05, 2015
I'd like to say thanks for the personal and direct response. I'm actually quite flattered, and I'm less ambivalent about enjoying the story from this point forward. Looking forward to Typhoid/Bloody Mary's confrontation with Spider-Man, and enjoyed the three-way between the Bombshells and Jessica. Some pretty good philosophical debating between the nurses, and later between Peter and his spider side as he comes to terms with what he did and what he may have unleashed. Definitely looking forward to where this story progresses from here.
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From Harbinger_Of_Kaos on January 05, 2015
It is good to see this isn't just Porn without Plot, it adds to the story even though we know what type of story this is.
So is the reflection a homage to the Other? Or just a plot device to show Peter trying to find an answer in lieu of what he did?
So basically, Peter's Venom acts as some sort of catalyst right? I mean in dormant mutants it awakens their X-gene's but in normal human's (albeit females) it grants them powers if certain genetic parameters are met? Would it boost non mutant meta's powers?

Well I would like to see more on the team Osborn is building, see what Natasha and Felicia are doing and see Janet as well since we haven't seen her in a while.
BTW will you kill off Elektra or "convert" her?
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From DarkVizard788 on January 04, 2015
Morrigan from Darkstalkers, Power Girl from DC Comics, and She Hulk are girls who I would love to see added to Spider-Man's harem.
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From ANON - ron on December 09, 2014
I think white tiger aka Ava Ayala and shehulk should be added to the harem.
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From ANON - TreblaTheory019 on December 03, 2014
Why are you hating on Nick Fury so much? I mean sure the guy's a manipulative jackass but at least he's being a manipulative jackass that's trying to help the world in his own way and not rule it like the other manipulative jackasses. Plus his appearance is based off of Samuel L. Jackson, and it's just criminal to make a guy who looks so much like Samuel freakin' L. Jackson look bad in any way. I'm hoping Peter will stop thinking of him as some sort of corrupt corporate excecutive dick like he views Norman Osborn as and see that he's not as bad of a person most people see him as. And I'm also hoping you don't kill off Fury or make his life hell in this fic, mostly because he thinks of Peter as a son and is genuinely regretful about what happened to his parents as well as his mistakes of the past, while Peter thinks of him as someone just as bad as, if not worse, than Norman Osborn and everybody in this fic seemingly hates his guts.

Also, I hope you plan on making Peter realize the mistakes he's making. I mean I enjoy seeing Peter sexing it up as much as the next guy, but he's pretty much becoming, if not already is, just another manipulative jackass who's only using his powers to get what he wants. Essentially becoming just like Norman and Nick, the two people he dislikes so much. I know he's supposed to be the hero in this story, I know it's partly the fault of the OZ formula corrupting him, and I know that it's up to you on where this story goes... But he's pretty much become a rapist with a 'Not If They Enjoyed It' rationalization already and is basically doing what he wants to do instead of doing what he needs to do. Sure he still helps people and saves lives, but he's also brainwashing the women he has sex with into becoming obedient sex partners and is slowly starting to lose himself in the process. Spider-Man's supposed to have an unbreakable will, but I guess his Ultimate incarnation doesn't have it. I enjoy your story and respect you as an author, I really do, but I just can't see Peter Parker as being Peter Parker anymore. I honestly hope you make Peter see that he's behaving like a sex-crazed reckless vigilante instead of a noble hero with bad publicity, because if he doesn't start getting a hold of himself now, it'll only be a matter of time before someone close to him pays the price for it.

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From AnansiScribe on November 07, 2014
Been following the story so far and still enjoying it a whole lot. However, the Mary Walker scene put me off a bit; I understand that it was the spider's hunger taking over Peter and suppressing his conscience, otherwise he'd have never done what he did to her, but it still unsettled me. It does work well with her original backstory, that it was a proto-Daredevil's recklessness in chasing down his father's murderer that caused Mary's personality fracture into Typhoid Mary and Bloody Mary, and now here it's Spider-Man's actions that unleash Typhoid (and maybe Bloody, too, for some karmic repercussions).

Aside from the situation with Mary, I'm liking how you've developed the Black Widow's backstory here and how her encounter with Spider-Man has affected her. Will Yelena come back at some point in this story now that you've introduced her, or was she just there to fill out Natasha's background? In any case, I do like most of where you're going with this story, and I'll be looking forward to when she confronts Spider-Man and his growing harem.
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From AgentGv01 on November 07, 2014
Well this was a long and well done chapter, I really liked that little back story for Black Widow in this when you added in the other one from the main Marvel universe into this as an old partner I find that very fitting for some reason. The Liz revelations were a nice touch although I do wonder how she'll handle what happened to her given that had to freak her out. Will she go to Peter or ask MJ first before going to Peter for a little moral support for instance.

The mary walker part couldn't have been easy to do and only marvel fans might get who that is but it should be a great reveal later on when she takes on her new name. Plus we have no idea how the venom will react with someone who has drugs already in their system either.

The black cat and electra part was nice as well, I can tell you skipped over the actual conversations either because you didn't want to make it feel dragged out or it was just going to be the same as in the comics? Still can't wait until Felicia gets into the group as well.
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From KaelHyun on November 06, 2014
Okay which Mary Jane are you using? Because the Best MJ is from the Ultimate Comics and shes a nerd like Peter and in fact helped/helps him out quite a bit. So Liz's thoughts are a surprising in the sense that MJ would obviously care about Peter they've best friends since forever.
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From ANON - The Captain on November 06, 2014
I enjoyed the lastest chapter of your story.

The dialogue between Spider-Man and Mary is from AgentGv01's Spider-Man: Dark Urges?

Gwen's Rape Fantasy & Black Cat's First Time Anal Sex...

Keep up the good work.
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From ANON - soulhope on July 30, 2014
very good story you have here like the nice balance of smut and story athough it would be nice if you described nipple color.it would be nice to see a team formation of shield new team like the ultimate spider man show. but having instead spidey and his girls with the addition of white tiger and wasp as the team leader. let the wasp live instead of being eaten. and have the ant/giant man given a taste of his own medicine by the spider when he catches the man in the act of harming one of his women.(i dont like pepole who abuse there loved ones. and unless its in the field or sparing ring a man should never hit a woman.) i like the avengers:emh wasp and the ultimate avengers movies so i would like to see her live. as for spideys venom it seems to hold the girls longer the more they get as it seems to alter the dna almost to crave peters attention you could say. i could give all the answers to the contest but i would have to cheat and use marvelpeadia to do it so i will say that blonsky is abomination enemy of the hulk and would be a mix of kimodo dragon and maybe bearded lizard DNA mixed with hulk serum and oz formula. i would say. cammila black is one of the avengers kids forget who i think its banners and has powers over posions throw i bleave her left arm witch is her stinger and posibly a mix of scorpion bee and other centipeed dna mix into her.. sorry for spelling errors. keep up the good work.
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From ANON - anon on July 28, 2014
I would like to see a bit of action of Peter with his Aunt May if it�s possible, she's hot in Ultimate, she being or not in the harem.

I would like to see Laura Kinney (X-23) added to the harem too.
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From Hazardine on July 27, 2014
Great Story, also would it be possible to see Morrigan Aensland added to the Harem
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From ANON - Anon on July 21, 2014
zarda- power princess

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