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Reviews for The Deal

By : Siren5864
  • From ANON - Katy on March 25, 2010
    OMG PLEASEEE PDATE THIS STORY!!!!
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  • From brainfear on January 19, 2010
    This story is fantastic! Honestly, there's not enough Logan/Jean fics out there. Love this!!!

    ch10
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  • From ANON - Alyssa on December 08, 2009
    Im so glad you decided to continue this story. Youve done a really great job. I hope its not almost done! And I hope you update again soon.
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  • From ANON - Tina on December 03, 2009
    I really am in love with this story. One of the best stories out there. Hope yo can update this soon.
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  • From ANON - Cassie on December 02, 2009
    You seriously need to update this story again soon. I want to see how the whole fight was resolved. I really liked the last 2 chapters if you couldnt tell.
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  • From ANON - Jenny on November 23, 2009
    Are you going to continue the story? I hope you do!
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  • From ANON - DevilRebel on November 20, 2009
    friggin' awsome!!! keep it up
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  • From ANON - DevilRebel on November 19, 2009
    well, now that family portrait story makes more sense. aswome by the way
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  • From ANON - TVO on November 13, 2009
    So much fun from start to finish. I really enjoyed the dialogue and the banter between Emma and Jean. So glad it ultimately worked out. The scenes with Logan and Jean together were amazing. SUPER CRAZY REGENERATIVE SPERM THAT DOES NOT QUIT! Awesome.
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  • From ANON - TVO on November 13, 2009
    This story is so much fun, glad to see you've continued it. However it would be nice if you continued the Logan/Jean X-men Evolution story you are doing as well ;) .

    I like where this is going, but I also like that in the epilogue we already know it ends well. The scenes with Logan and Jean are very well done and passionate. I'm not particularly a Jean/Logan shipper (sort of got tired of it), but you definitely create a good attraction and dynamic between them where I can buy into it and enjoy it. Also like that Jean is worried about Logan at the end.
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  • From ANON - MeyK on October 06, 2009
    Hot damn. Haven't read a good Logan/Jean fic in awhile, especially one that makes you wish you were Jean. Your story was in my head most of the night. I loved that you expanded on Logan's animalistic nature. One of the best parts of reading such fanfic is getting that sense of the extent of his feelings for Jean and how he'd be with her. You expressed their passion very, *ahem* very well. Your summary on how issue #117 should've gone down had me tickled.
    I liked the touch of humor you put in some parts, especially the "sip of beer" comment near the end. That'd be so Logan!
    I admit there were parts where I felt Logan's reactions weren't characteristic of the way I've thought him to be, such as his interaction with Scott in being somewhat hesitant despite knowing the gravity of the situation. However, that's just my take and I respect other points of view on his character.
    Hope you keep writing more!
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  • From ANON - Sev on October 04, 2009
    A lot of this is pretty good. I was especially touched by the "Jeannie, it's our baby," line. The way #117 worked out always bugged me, so it's great to see a take on it that fixes Logan's moment of stupid.

    Parts of this need work. Your dialogue paragraphs are a bit messy. If one character is speaking, it shouldn't be on three separate lines, but one contained paragraph. It makes parts of the story choppy and difficult to read.

    I loved their encounters in the woods. Very nicely written. You touched on the whole Logan/animal dichotomy very nicely.

    The ending was extremely rushed. Never mind what seemed like the awkwardness of Jean being a bridesmaid at her ex-husband's wedding (really?), but that we never see the fallout between Scott and Jean. After your careful set up of the rest of the story, I think the fallout and the subsequent consequences, both good and bad, would have been interesting to see.

    James and Rosie as their kids? I heartily approve. In my head canon, Logan and Jean have a daughter and name her Rosie, so it tickled me pink to see this in someone else's story. Good job all around.
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