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Reviews for Pretending

By : xireth
  • From ANON - MiDemoni on July 30, 2008
    It's me again after a really long period of getting my internet connection cursed... Or so it seems to me. But on the bright side: I did get to read two chappies at once. Lucky me XP

    At first I was very pleased with Todd but then... A Scott sex-scene! Oh my poor eyes... It was really hard task to keep reading when I just wanted to shout: Run, Kurt run! Teleport to Todd's side! It's the git who is being touchy-feely! Noooo~

    I try to live in hope but when you said it would take a long time to his gittiness get his ass kicked... are we talking one-figured sum of chapters or are you going to keep us poor readers suffering for twenty-odd chappies? And what about Kurt: his childhood is going to be ruined! All his first are going to be with Scott... *pitiful sniffling*

    But aside Scott-bashing I must inform you about the improvement of the narrating flow. These chapters were easy to read and I was really getting caught up in the plot. Good work!

    And I'm happy to hear that my English isn't that awful. Being a student in the Department of Languages and hanging out with the English majors, it's pretty hard not to aim too high. I so envy those guys and keep comparing myself to them. (But the they have problems with our native and I can act pompous and revise their essays... XD)

    Keep writing (and giving Todd more screen-time)and I'll keep trying to fing my way to aff.net without internet...
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  • From NAnderson on July 12, 2008
    Ok can I point out how incredibly slow I feel now..... I just spent 5 minutes figuring out what u were talking about when u said something the naruto story lol . I didnt even know i had u bookmarked twice. Yep that used up my slow moments aloud for one day...

    Now for this story, let me first say My main guy in x-men has always been and will always be Wolverine, so that should tell u how much I dont like Scott Summers... Frankly he has no right to touch Kurt. I may be tainted against him for my love of logan, or maybe its my love of nightcrawler that makes me say scott's not good enough for him((If u can guess my fav pairing u get a cookie lol))... but ive never been a real fan of toad and yet Im liking the thought of him with kurt a lot more... The story so far is still going great, and im starting to think that ur life revolves around rping all day, to have more then one great story going from the rping.

    As for the naruto story compared to this one........... Thats a tough one.... there are are as many good points for this story as there are for thee other.... they both had hot rape scenes in them... that ones a threesome.... but this one has our favorite little blue dude (beast is the big blue dude)).... that one has a unique p iring in it..... but so dose this one and its in an area that has very few good stories in it... Granted in the naruto story the way the people talk to each other flows a lot better then in this one for some reason, yet thats not something to use when picking the best story...... That really is a hard choice and both stories have so many possibilities that could happen that its just not possible to pick one thats the best yet..... how about we wait until both stories r done and then i give u a definite answer ok?

    Well now that ive taken up so much of ur time let me go ahead and stop typing. Keep up the good writing.
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  • From ANON - Shadow-Assassin on June 29, 2008
    I'm too lazy to log in... but this fanfic is AWSOME... I don't like Toad... but I so want him to get with Toad in this fanfic. =^-^= *Huggles Kurt plushy*
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  • From ANON - Anon on June 29, 2008
    i'm hooked! the plot line is interesting, and the characterization/voice is well written and pretty canon for the most part. thanks for sharing and hope to see the next update soon!
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  • From NAnderson on June 25, 2008
    lol nice. very nice. There needs 2 b more stories like this. and if they were even half as well written as this one I would be one happy camper. U have a real charm 4 catching the persona of each of the x-men (and the brotherhood members) and keeping them real. I hate it when they go all OOC. It tends to tick me off lol. Well ur doing a splendid job, so go have a cookie, and I shall await an update!
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  • From ANON - lonelydove on May 28, 2008
    Absolutely love it!!!! Can't wait to see what happens next and i hope everything goes well ;)
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  • From ANON - MiDemoni on May 15, 2008
    Ah, glad to hear that you got something out of my little review.

    I know the pains of co-ed writing and I really respect those authors that actually make it work... (Like Neil Gaiman and Terry Pratchett in Good Omens.) But know what? This chapter was easy to read XD So now I have to bitch and moan about something else... Damn it.

    And the only thing that makes my skin crawl is Scott. While reading this chapter I got this weird need to smack him... It may be because I'm rooting for Todd and really can't picture Kurt with the eye-challenged git. So now I'm hoping that Todd has his second coming and the git hooks up with Jean. Or mirror. Whatever rocks his boat.

    And about the bit of little me editing this... The offer is tempting, I must admit. But there are couple of reasons why I can't do it at this point. The first is simply that I really don't trust my English, even though it is my strongest foreign language. The second is about the timing. I can't promise that I'd have time and energy to focus on this while doing my Bachelor's thesis at the same time. But if this little piece of art is still un-edited when I'm done, I'll make sure to give this an another look.

    Now I just have to keep waiting for the 'doom of the git', won't I? Maybe in the next chapter? (So no pressures, eh? XP)

    Have fun writing!
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  • From ANON - Schan on May 14, 2008
    Thank you so much!! I really love long chapters XD I hope you don't mind me saying so but I think it is very well written. Although I've missed Todd a little... I really like how you describe his emotions and character
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  • From ANON - Schan on May 09, 2008
    I had never read a Todd/Kurt fic, bt i'm glad to have read yours; I like it very much and i hope you update very soon
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  • From ANON - Anon on April 28, 2008
    I love your fic! I can't wait for the next chapter!! :D
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  • From ANON - MiDemoni on April 28, 2008
    Hi! This is just too good to be not reviewed, so may I present your first review for this fic.

    I think your plot is very promising and, even though I have seen only the two first movies and read X-men comics about five years ago, you have made the characters very real. You haven't done the same mistake like some in the Potterdom and wrote the whole usiverse and its actions in your fic but luckily you don't either overestimate your readers and leave the characters half-done. That's definitely a very strong aspect in this story.

    But I must say that there is one confusing feature in your writing style and that is when the narration changes its point of view. At those points there are kind of narrational flashbacks. It's pretty weird when reading because it really does mess up the chronological order. The narration would be perfect if you could be careful when changing the point of view. I suggest that you could either make someone to read your fic before posting just for picking out those passages or leave the chapter to "rest" and read it through some time later.

    But nevertheless you have written thus far a very good fic. And a review just isn't proper without the traditional "please, update" part, so here it is: please don't leave this fic hanging because it really is well made and it has huge potential. But don't stress about updating too quickly, but take your time and polish each chapter so you are happy with it. It would be really annoying for yourself. Trust me, I had to take writing lessons in my university before I stopped handing out half-finished stories... '^_^

    Good writing moments, I'll be waiting how this is going to develop. Have a nice spring!
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