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Reviews for Eye of the Beholder

By : TheShadowCat
  • From ANON - blue_lioness on November 04, 2006
    *brow furrows* um... was this chapter meant to get cut off in mid-sentence or was there a glitch, hon?
    May want to double check.
    ROFL *I wish*
    dammitdammitdammit... must stop reading this when I am in location that does not allow me to snort and laugh like a drunk and rowdy cowgirl... I think I hurt myself keeping in the laughs with Amanda and Hank... oh pleeeeeease update again soon :).
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  • From ANON - blue_lioness on November 02, 2006
    *falls off couch laughing*
    Priceless. Bravo. And now we are all still hanging off the cliff waiting to see her reaction when he reveals he was said snooty voice all along. Beautiful chapter with a good balance of 'awww' and humor. Can't wait for the next!
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  • From ANON - Wendy Harmon on November 01, 2006
    Wonderful work, I'm glad Rachel (saphirelioness) recommended your work. Poor Hank, *laughs* he just doesn't seem to have any luck with her on the phone. I hope you keep updating because I really would enjoy reading more. Keep up the wonder work and hang in there.
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  • From ANON - onewing on October 31, 2006
    YES!!!!!! They're finally going to meet! This is going to be very interesting. I look forward to the next chapter.
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  • From Namipulla on October 31, 2006
    Ooh, a quick update! Nice :) So finally Hank and Amanda meet. Can't wait fot the next Chapter! PS. I had to listen to Phantom of the Opera while reading this.
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  • From ANON - blue_lioness on October 31, 2006
    cruel cruel cruel - UPDATE SOON! oy... ya build up and ya build up just to cliffie us again!? I hate it as much as I grudgingly love it, well done. This was an excellent chapter and I certainly can't wait to finally have some dialogue between these two outside of 'no I'm not Brian', lol! *updateupdateupdateupdate* is that too subtle?
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  • From ANON - blue_lioness on October 31, 2006
    *snorts* oh, bravo, perfect chapter ending... and I'm so glad 14 is already up! Sorry I came in late on the reviews, busy week... of course it doesn't look like you have to blackmail for reviews anymore *big grin*. Wonderful work, hon, can't wait to see what keeps happening... :D
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  • From ANON - onewing on October 29, 2006
    Thanks for the laughs! I can't wait for Amanda and and Henry to meet in person.
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  • From ANON - sunshyne on October 29, 2006
    Since I am a fan of the 'Hellboy' story, I had to read this one as well. Please more. Curosity is killing me.
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  • From ANON - onewing on October 26, 2006
    OHHH! That is so rotten, not telling us who the new roommate is (though I think I know)! :)
    Anyway, as usual, it's a good chapter and I'm looking forward to the next saga. I think Amanda should be her legal guardian if possible.
    Looking forward to the next update.
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  • From ANON - sunshyne2378 on October 26, 2006
    More Please!
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  • From ANON - JusttaWatcher on October 25, 2006
    The characters internal musings give too much away. It takes away from the emotional tension and build up of the story. For instance, there isn’t really any need to say what Beast is thinking about Storm so specifically. The same can be applied to other character relationships. Subtlety would work better.

    The erotic side notes also seemed rather out of place. He doesn’t seem the type to give voice to such thoughts in a casual way. Granted, he didn’t voice it. You voiced it as an omniscient narrator, but I think the result is similar. It stands to cheapen future erotic moments. Personally, I would hold off on those sorts of playful, semi-erotic inserts until he is involved in a more committed relationship.

    If you find yourself needing to explain things a character shouldn’t directly say, I would suggest using what you have already established. You have gossipy teenage girls for casual information. You also have possibilities for more in depth analysis. You have Rogue. I personally think Rogue has been through enough to have some maturity beyond her years. She is also, by force of her mutation, a consuming people watcher. She would make an excellent translator. It seems entirely likely that she could explain the dynamics between Beast, Storm and Nightcrawler. Having her do it would help maintain tension. She would also be a good confidant for Serena since Kitty flaked.

    I didn’t really get why Kitty flaked like that. She never came across as that sort to me. Perhaps you could explain it more now that you are moving towards a relationship between Serena and Rogue.

    I like the idea of Storm with Kurt. They had startlingly good chemistry in the second movie. I did not think she had any with Beast. They seemed more friendly than romantic but that could just be because I liked her with Nightcrawler. I also like the idea of Kurt showing a light playful side. It seems in character and he is endearing.

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  • From Namipulla on October 25, 2006
    Ohmygodohmygod! This is too much! Cannot cope. Off to Mordor. No, seriously, these cliffhangers are killing me. Please update soon!
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  • From ANON - blue_lioness on October 25, 2006
    *chuckles* I think I speak for a lot of readers when I say I completely feel Amanda's mixture of affection and infuriation with her parents and the hostage crisis of her cell phone... I adore how you've done her family, especially the working in of religion/faith - not an easy thing to usually do in fanfics but you're pulling it off nicely and with a healthy dose of levity. Can't wait to see what goes down in the next chapter, but please for the love of Twinkies tell me we're getting very close to this big party at which we all suppose Hank and Amanda will FINALLY clandetinely meet...
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  • From Namipulla on October 24, 2006
    Great work again. :) I think it only makes the story more interesting when there are many different plotlines which eventually bind together. If I may say, your way of writing reminds me of Marian Keyes, dunno exactly why. Maybe it’s something about Amanda’s family. (In this point I might as well excuse if my reviews don’t somehow make sense, I’m not a native English speaker).
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