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Reviews for Ultimate Exile

By : marvelmaster616
  • From ANON - Cheef Keef on July 13, 2014
    I want to see more of this story and universe. Ultimate Jean, 616 Scott, damaged goods together. Love it.
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  • From redsliver on January 08, 2014
    Well written and from Jean's point of view an excellent story. I find it difficult to imagine that a 22 year old Jean as the Jean Scott would eventually come to love. But I am picturing a 30 something Scott.

    Still everything works and plays out smoothly. I personally prefer colder starts. What you did works well. You managed to navigate through very long expositional conversations and explanations to set the stage and defend your premise. The payoff, not just the sex but the emotional connection, followed excellently. You write vividly with remarkable character insight. My only complaint is in an earlier moment, when teenaged time displaced Jean recognizes the arrival of Ultimate Jean, you label each of the original Xteam via said teenaged Bobby/Scott/Hank... i approve of parallelism but that cluster of paragraphs lacks the cadence of the rest of the piece.

    I quite enjoyed this story. Thank you for sharing.
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