Reviews for Delicious Torment

BY : darkangelaryannrhod


  • From RogueMudblood on January 09, 2013

    It's certainly a sweet PWP. You've got a couple typos, but nothing too distracting.

    The only thing that really stands out to me are Logan's reactions. I doubt he wouldn't know that he was brushing up against a woman's cervix. Also, I hardly see him as quick to climax as you've portrayed, given his overall stamina.

    I do like that you've involved both of them in the act. I like that Jubilee is very involved in arousing Logan, rather than simply allowing him to take the lead.

    Overall, very nicely done. Thank you for sharing, and happy writing!

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